Hermione
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 Posted: Jan 24th, 2008 at 11:42 am
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http://www.foodallergysupport.com is a free on-line community where anyone living with allergies to peanuts/other foods can learn and share information, coping strategies, frustrations and successes with a lively and supportive group that lives with the same challenges; we exist to help one another find the balance between safety and normalcy.
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Posted: Jan 24th, 2008 at 04:00 pm
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Jan 24th, 2008 at 11:42 am, Hermione wrote:
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http://www.foodallergysupport.com is a free on-line community where anyone living with allergies to peanuts/other foods can learn and share information, coping strategies, frustrations and successes with a lively and supportive group that lives with the same challenges; we exist to help one another find the balance between safety and normalcy.
Thanks!
~CM2
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Is the word ANYONE the better one? Could it be THOSE or something like it? ANYONE sounds kind of off to me. Also "that lives with the same challenges" sounds a bit off too. I am no expert, it just sounds off.
Otherwise the statement is a good one.
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Posted: Jan 24th, 2008 at 09:22 pm
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I'm glad you mention peanuts specifically, but also say food allergies generally. I don't think people who come in here with only other food allergies, not PA or TNA, are going to know what is going on with all this assumption that we're talking about PA unless we somehow let them know that. I've been afraid that either we'll tremendously confuse new non-PA visitors or we'll have to re-arrange the site, at the least. But everyone is welcome and we talk so much about all kinds of allergies.
I love the "balance between safety and normalcy"; that's at the heart of so much of what we talk about. And "lively" is a good warning and advertisement.
I'd make the part after the semi-colon a separate sentence. If we're talking about composition.
ETA: I like Ajas' suggestions for readability (below). Maybe also say "peanuts or other foods".
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Posted: Jan 24th, 2008 at 09:26 pm
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I agree with Peg - I like what the statement says, but the wording she pointed out does seem a little off. Maybe ...a lively and supportive group facing the same challenges.
I also support changing anyone to those.
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Posted: Jan 24th, 2008 at 09:35 pm
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Suggested wording & maybe punctuation changes using the line out feature. And maybe some color if I haven't totally screwed it up.
http://www.foodallergysupport.com is a free, on-line community where anyone those living with
allergies to peanuts/other foods can learn and share information, coping strategies,
frustrations, and successes with a lively and supportive group that who lives with the same
challenges; we exist to help one another find the balance between safety and normalcy.
Yes, I know the comma after frustrations is not "the way" anymore. However, the series is long and for readability, I would insert that comma. This was "the way" once upon a time . . .
The comma suggestion between free & online is likely debatable. (What isn't debatable?)
~e
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Posted: Jan 24th, 2008 at 10:27 pm
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This sounds great to me overall! A couple of little thoughts. I'd like to see the word " " added to can learn and share information, coping strategies, frustrations and successes with a lively and supportive group . It might even replace the word frustrations. I think challenges is more general. It'll cover more emotions than just frustrations.
I have a different reaction to we exist to help one another find the balance between safety and normalcy. I don't think this accurately represents us. If I were first coming here and read that, I might say that this is a place for people with loose comfort zones, where safety is sacrificed due to the importance of having normalcy. I know what you're trying to get across, and I think it's an important point, but I don't think this phrasing is right. So, I should offer a counter-suggestion, right? Unfortunately, I don't have one at this time. I tried for a little while, but nothing was quite right. I'll sleep on it and try again another time soon.
ETA: Thanks for all of the work that has gone into drafting this mission statement!
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Posted: Jan 25th, 2008 at 11:15 am
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What happened to something simple, like:
A Mission Statement: To help, support and provide a community for those living with Food Allergies.
Sure, I know.... I'm not putting it there cause I think you should use it... I think, though, a mission statement should be plain, simple, down to earth and to the point.
The one that is suggested is just over the top to me... and, btw, it should be "similar" challenges...... I also don't like the last whole "we exist" thing....
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Posted: Jan 25th, 2008 at 11:44 am
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lively and supportive
sounds like an underwire bra with a vibrate function
he he
I liked the statement as it was....but a few tweaks...ala Peg would be good too.
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I spell bad and am not a medical professional.
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Hermione
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Posted: Jan 25th, 2008 at 11:59 am
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Posted: Jan 25th, 2008 at 12:58 pm
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I don't know what mission statements are supposed to look like. Should it be short and sweet like gvmom suggested or the one posted, tweaked, as suggested?
ETC: typos as usual - when the fingers don't work anymore, you've really got a problem. :
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Posted: Jan 25th, 2008 at 01:31 pm
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Okay, I've thought about it. I prefer gvmom's. I like short, sweet, concise, and clear.
I'll see if I can look up some other mission statements to-day (later) and see what they're like, but right now, I do prefer gvmom's.
The one presented, to me, sounds too wordy and almost pretentious?
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Posted: Jan 25th, 2008 at 01:32 pm
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Am unclear if pretentious is the word I'm looking for, but something like it.
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Posted: Jan 25th, 2008 at 07:55 pm
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I too think it's a little wordy. I like short mission statements.
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Posted: Jan 25th, 2008 at 08:15 pm
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Posted: Jan 28th, 2008 at 09:36 am
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It sounds like we're still in the process of deciding actually what our mission is. With peanuts and tree nuts becoming a section and Main being for general food allergy issues, we really are moving to become a general food allergy board then, right? Without a peanut focus. If that's what we're doing, the mission statement shouldn't say "peanuts" at all. I don't mind either way; I just want to be consistent and clear.
I think mission statements can go two ways. They can be really short and general. Or they can be more specific and define the parameters of the group. The second way can help to explain what is different about this particular group. It can also help us decide in the future if something we're considering falls under what we say we're about or not. I do like the current mission statement, once we change a few details.
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